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OK, so I have two characters, and they are very snappy to each other (as they are to everyone) and yet I'm planning a romance between them that hasn't emerged yet.

Here's a little bit of conversation between the two after the girl became sick and the boy is acting as her caretaker:

I woke up to Thomas staring at me from a chair across the room. "Go away, I'm fine," I snapped. He replied with "I'm sorry, do you have memory loss as well? Because last I checked, you couldn't stand," I glared at him. "Why are you still here anyway, I'm pretty sure all I've been so far is rude" I asked. He shrugged "I like being close to you," he said.

It's actually pretty far along in the story, and Thomas' statement "I like being close to you" comes dangerously close to exposing the truth. How do I tell when (now, a bit later, or much later) to bring it out into the open.

Tom Au
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You can indicate attraction with nothing more than intense interest. If your characters are secretly attracted to one another, they will watch each other very closely. They will remember each other's likes and dislikes, even when mentioned in passing, and they may use this information to needle each other.

Your POV character will think about Thomas a lot. She may make observations to herself about how Thomas looks, moves, and smells. She will be very aware of him physically. He may exasperate her but he will be on her mind.

An observation: "I like being close to you," clearly signifies interest and doesn't sound snappish at all. You may want to dial that back if you're still in the beginning stages of their romance.

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