The title sums it up. I would like advice on how to write the yell of a gatekeeper calling to attention the people approaching the gate.
Pretty much like some scenes where they go: "OOOOiiii, who goes there?"
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Do any of these answer your question? How do I write a shriek?, When writing, should I describe a scream instead of having the character yell out "Ahhhh!", How would I write a squeal? – Laurel Jan 11 '22 at 23:27
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I did look at those answers before. I decided to still go with this question because I think it adds to the scene the way the gatekeeper yells, and not just writing that he gave a long yell of a couple of vowels and asked who goes there. But I may be wrong. English is not my native language. – mcbecker Jan 11 '22 at 23:35
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Out of curiosity, how is a gatekeeper's yell different from general screaming in a loud voice in your native language? – NofP Jan 12 '22 at 00:12
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It is not different. I just have this scene with this specific yell in mind and I was curious to see how it should be written. – mcbecker Jan 12 '22 at 00:32
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Oi! Who goes there?
Otherwise
Hoy! Who goes there?
or
Ahoy! Who goes there?
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ahoy_(greeting)
In your specific case, altering a 'standard' spelling by repeating some of the letters has a comedic effect. If that was not your intention, then you are probably better off with the usual capitalization of the first letter, and a 'traditional' spelling.
You can convey a particular tone or accent by using a specific verb (e.g. bellow, belch, echo) and describing the sound (e.g. whether it lasted long past the first echo, or it was just a sudden shriek like the whistling of a kite).
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